Honestly, what do you think of this short part of my story?

I don't think i would change much if anything. The only thing is that it would seem in the beginning it is sunset and that the curfew is at or near sunset. If that is how you portray it in the story its fine but if the curfew is later in the night when crimes occur you might say the bell signal 2 hours till curfew or something like that. Its very good I want to know what Cornelia did :) !!!!!